Hey love, I really like it! It's not like all those stereotypical stories, which is quite nice. I really do like that there is a change in Louis' character. That's my favourite kind of story, because you kind of are closer to the characters and you can actually experience their struggle and their development together with them. Additionally, I like the fact that your chapters are not too short and not too long. And I find quite good that Harry and Louis aren't crushing on each other right from the start because these stories are always really predictable. On the contrary, when chosing a beginning like you did there are thousands of possibilities for them to get together. I prefer this by a lot. Furthermore, I really like your style and the way you have Louis reflect on the events. This way I can experience the characters' thoughts and feelings quite well which I find rather nice. Wow, this was a long monologue. (Don't judge me, my major courses are English and German, I am a language person.) I hope I was able to help you and encourage you to keep going. If you need a beta or any other help, feel free to ask! And if you don't mind, could you read my fanfiction? It's not really long yet and it would mean the world to me. Thanks and all the love xx
