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@OntoImpossibleDreams  your welcome and thank you for asking me to read it. I can’t wait to see the finished piece.

@angel_supernatural Thanks so much for the corrections. I know that it was majorly flawed considering I wrote it in a small period of time, I was already over the word limit of 500. So I had to crush some things down. This is an idea of a story that could happen. Thank you so much!

The story idea is fantastic, it’s sweet, funny, and romantic. But there are grammatical errors, and a few things could be rephrased. And here’s a tip, make them both flawed, make them both more real. It leaves a greater impact on the reader. And I’m going to need a bit more clarity about her father. (P.S. choke dat hoe girl!!! Jump her ass at the park. Listen to Kevin) You could even, show Kevin bailing her out of trouble and sharing his troubles with her. But I love that you got everything out there.

@OntoImpossibleDreams oh okay

@LovePink240 I don't know, I have a draft but the idea is getting harder to finish