PAwolfman

@xImprintedx  I have just looked over your book for errors and noticed that in chapter one you switch from you talking to him talking but you get things mixed up saying first his than my or I   Thought you should know. PA

Spagbol99

Hey, thank you so much for voting for my book ‘Lay Low’.  I hope you get the chance to read it all and let me know what you think.  I’ll be honest, I live for the feedback...! ;-)

Spagbol99

Thank you so much for taking the time to reply.  I’m glad that you enjoyed then book and felt the emotions of the characters.  Also I’m appreciative of your support having read my other books too!  Hope you are keeping safe, T
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PAwolfman

@Spagbol99  honestly I liked it.  I read some of your other works and this is my favorite.  I'm American btw, but I could still feel that I understood the setting well.  The emotion you give the character and the ending are excellent.  I started to get uncomfortable when the main character began unraveling (the drugs for example) because I saw myself a lot in him and the change was a surprise, but you gave it real purpose in the therapist office.  Some parts I'm sure could use more fleshing out as writing goes, but I'm not a writer (I'm actually a 21 y/o medical student lol, not exactly a literature expert) so I'm not going to try and pick out any mistakes.  Just wanted to say it's a good read.  Thanks!
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PAwolfman

The trees they whisper 
          The birds they sing
          The young creatures they whimper
          In earths stormy ring
          
          The storm it does bellow
          The clouds they are grey
          The people greet hello
          On this stormy day
          
          
          
          
          Would you believe I'm in middle school