@sarahmunsser23
Alrighty, so I have gotten the chance to look at your book. I think the premise is good and its too early to tell about plot because it is only a few chapters long. In the first few chapters, some of the formating through me for a loop because I wasn't sure if that was supposed to happen or if it was just some glitches in the system. I like your perspective changes but I think you should stick to your main protagonist for starters to help set scenes and than start switching between your main characters perspectives. Although I found the changes interesting, I think it would be beneficial for a more developed character perspective change instead of just capitalizing the 'I' every time a new person(perspective) comes in. Maybe start a new chapter with that new person or add a line like * * * , to help show a shift in narrative.
Overall for a first book, very good. Congratulations!!
