PaperPumpkin2

Happy Silksong Day!!!! Don't know how many people here play video games or Hollow Knight for that matter. But this is pretty much the only platform I'm on and been waiting for this game for years so I had to share the celebrations somewhere. If any of you do play games, what's some of your fav?

Alright, it's been almost an entire year since i was regularly on Wattpad. Not proud of that. Things happen in life, and Wattpad kept getting shoved to the side. But I don't want to keep doing that, so from now on I'm scheduling Wattpad back into my life. I'm back, baby! Be warned though, for those of you I've been reading your stories, I've got quite the backlog of reading to do, so it might be awhile before I get to yours, but I'm actively working towards it.

Hello! Just checking in to see if you're doing ok? I don't normally reach out to people online (which I should really fix that habit), but I understand it's getting more and more daunting to go online nowadays. I hope you're doing alright.

Just popping in real quick to wish y'all a Merry Christmas and Happy Holidays! With the new year, my work will be calming down which means I'll be back to reading everyone's stories sometime in January =) Take care everyone!

@sangre-del-sol love your work as always

@SoloSangre Sorrrrryyyy for taking so long to respond, I haven't been very active  these past few weeks ^_^'
          
          I love your story and the plot and Dr. Robin is such a great villain. DARF would make such an amazing tv show that I want so freakin bad >-<
          
          As far as critiques, I'd say the biggest issue is how many POVs you have and how short the chapters are. It can give the reader whiplash and be confusing at times on where we are in terms of scene and action.
          
          I wouldn't suggest cutting out characters, cause I enjoy them all =) You could write more to make the scenes longer, but honestly a much easier solution would be reorganizing the chapters so that they read a bit more cohesively and have the scene complete a thought.
          
          Ex: Lux finds Corvus after he's been shot, she has an idea. Then we suddenly jump to Javier, then to Dr. Robin, then finally back to Corvus for Lux to tell him to turn into a crow.
          
          Instead you could have Lux finds Corvus, then immediately have Corvus being told to turn into a crow, then have Javier and Dr. Robin pov. This allows the reader to fully invest in such an important scene before jumping to a different POV. You could also move Javier POV to before Lux finds Corvus. He is coming to grips with killing Corvus and, at the time, the reader thinks Javier did kill him.
          
          Hopefully this makes sense and was somewhat helpful =)
          
          Also if you're worried about the lack of views/votes just know that's got nothing to do with the quality of your story. I've read books on Wattpad that are good enough to be published and I'm literally the only one reading it.  And the views on my book, well, that's from other writers who I've been reading their stories

Thanks for voting on my chapters! I appreciate all support 

How do you make ur covers? I'm new to writing and I have no idea how to make good covers

@PaperPumpkin2 thank goodness

Hello! I hope this isn't too weird but I noticed you haven't been active lately and wanted to check and see if you were alright.