PaperPumpkin2

@sangre-del-sol love your work as always

Thank you so much!!!!! This is super helpful! I did notice that the multiple perspectives got confusing, even more so by the fact they are all in first person, but yeah I will try reorganise them so make understanding easier. 
            Thank you again for taking the time to give me feedback!

@SoloSangre Sorrrrryyyy for taking so long to respond, I haven't been very active  these past few weeks ^_^'
            
            I love your story and the plot and Dr. Robin is such a great villain. DARF would make such an amazing tv show that I want so freakin bad >-<
            
            As far as critiques, I'd say the biggest issue is how many POVs you have and how short the chapters are. It can give the reader whiplash and be confusing at times on where we are in terms of scene and action.
            
            I wouldn't suggest cutting out characters, cause I enjoy them all =) You could write more to make the scenes longer, but honestly a much easier solution would be reorganizing the chapters so that they read a bit more cohesively and have the scene complete a thought.
            
            Ex: Lux finds Corvus after he's been shot, she has an idea. Then we suddenly jump to Javier, then to Dr. Robin, then finally back to Corvus for Lux to tell him to turn into a crow.
            
            Instead you could have Lux finds Corvus, then immediately have Corvus being told to turn into a crow, then have Javier and Dr. Robin pov. This allows the reader to fully invest in such an important scene before jumping to a different POV. You could also move Javier POV to before Lux finds Corvus. He is coming to grips with killing Corvus and, at the time, the reader thinks Javier did kill him.
            
            Hopefully this makes sense and was somewhat helpful =)
            
            Also if you're worried about the lack of views/votes just know that's got nothing to do with the quality of your story. I've read books on Wattpad that are good enough to be published and I'm literally the only one reading it.  And the views on my book, well, that's from other writers who I've been reading their stories

@123123Shahad123123 Your story the Forgotten Ones cover looks great tho, it's the whole reason why I clicked on it
            
            I drew the my cover on clip studio paint tho I bet you could get something great with AI too.  As for tips, I tried making the image simple, clean, but dramatic. I kept the colors basic too so it wouldn't be distracting (also cause I suck at coloring ^^') Oh, one tip someone gave me was making the first letter of each word bigger than the rest. So the letter F in forgotten and the O in ones are bigger.

@House_Sparrow Nah, it ain't weird. It's actually really sweet :) Don't worry though, I'm good. I like to disconnect from the internet every now and then just to sort of reset and keep my mental health in check. Thanks for checking up though. It means a lot.

@FrozenJars Mostly just been relaxing, which as an adult that basically is fun ^^' I'm back now and excited to read y'all chapters!

@PaperPumpkin2  sure

@PaperPumpkin2 I hope you're going to be off doing something fun! <3 Stay safe

@FrozenJars ofc! =)

@Tunmioss any time =D

@leongenesis2324 ofc =)

@PaperPumpkin2  yay!!! 

@luke95_yt may you have all the luck of every leprechaun in the world. Editing is hard for all writers

@luke95_yt I'm really editing wish me luck :3

@luke95_yt no problem =)