Hiya ! Phoenixday19! I would like to give you some advice to help with your writing!
1. Try to give each of your characters more personality !
2. Try to have traits that define your characters more Ex. N is always cheerful , even when Alice was cutting him open . Another Ex. J , she always wants to be on the winning side or just wanting to do anything for the company , and when N questioned the company she got pissed and killed him. So you kind of need each of your characters to have a central idea or emotion that empowers them.
Also be a little more descript with setting ( Not saying that you are not , just try to be a little more descript )
But overall I love your writing ! It's amazing and would like too see more!
