Orbital_Verbose

I think It's better if we discuss here than in your book.
          
          If you're new here, welcome. I'm not sure to be the best reader you will have but I'll do my best until the book boring me (already happens) or to the end of the story (also happening).
          
          English is not my mother tongue but I'm truing to improve it through what I can read on the plateform.
          
          If you want to be read, you'll have to make your own ad on social media's or read other's stories. As you want.

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@ Orbital_Verbose  Hello, no need to be sorry. I am on holiday too, new chapters will be delayed. Thanks for your continuous support.
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Orbital_Verbose

Hello, Sorry, I haven't went back reading your story, but I just came back from holidays and no one have work on my subject during this time... So, Everything is on late...
            
            I'll be back reading ASAP
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Orbital_Verbose

@Orbital_Verbose
            
            I go back to the main subject : your story.
            
            A I said previously my main problem is the human reaction all characters don't have (despite they should have).
            
            On the other hand, you writting style is very clear, and have a great scenaristic values. Some description are missing (classic problem for everybody), but you take your time for each path in order there's no misunderstanding by the reader. You just share what happens and that'a all, the reader make his own opinion (right or wrong this will be clearer later)
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