@tasyawrts
Hey! Please don’t say sorry at all—I’m honestly not disturbed, I’m really happy that you reached out and asked for my suggestion. It actually means a lot when someone values your opinion like that.
I already went through your story, and I have to say, it’s really amazing! The way you’ve written it kept me hooked, and it shows how much effort you’ve put into it. For your very first story, it’s a wonderful start, and I’m sure with time and more writing, you’ll become even better.
I’ll definitely recommend it to my friends who enjoy reading too. Keep going, keep writing, and never hesitate to share your work like this—you’ve got talent!