Pnuokus

Come check out the first two chapters of my book.
          	
          	https://www.wattpad.com/story/122735595

electricblue

Hello. Thanks so much for adding, The Locker Room, to your reading list. Hope you enjoy it!

Pnuokus

@electricblue I think you should try detailing the setting or like describe something around her.
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electricblue

@Pnuokus I appreciate your honesty. And you're right - the first sentence really doesn't bring in the reader very well. It was one of the things that I needed to change.
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