Hey Pollen hope you are doing good!!! I have read your story Purity and Blood Book One: The Eternal and I’m really enjoying the story. My favorite part is Akatra’s character her confidence, unpredictability, and the way she interacts with power systems like the Voice and the false flame. Her scenes always feel intense and memorable, especially when she challenges things others are afraid to even understand.
I also really like the dynamic between Akatra, Seradin, and the Blood General. The tension, control, and unspoken understanding between them keeps every scene engaging, especially when strategy and emotion overlap during the rituals and crises.
One small suggestion: sometimes the descriptions and internal mechanics become very dense so a bit more balance between action and explanation could make the pacing even smoother without losing the depth. Thankyou looking forward to your next chapters thanks <3