Pompey Magnusson

I've written four short stories, and I'm finishing a fifth. Would love opinions on it. Thank you so much :-)

So I went back to the butcher block and started writing everything over. I kept the prologue pretty much the same but edited it. Hope you like it 
          
          Chapters 1 and 2 are completely new. I'm writing chapter that comes in between one and two right now, so chapter 2 will probably become chapter 3 later. But chapters one and two follow each other so that works. 
          
          Tell me what you think of the writing style now, and the story, basically if you're interested in seeing where it's going? :-) thank you so much, really need some feedback on this! :-)

Hey guys! Just wanted to say I'm writing two chapters at once. I'm trying to release a chapter a week. It takes a little time. But just know, that I'm still trying to get one out and the next few days since that'll be in about a week's time. Doing two at once is crazy, but that's just how it's coming out of me. Anyways, looking forward to posting soon :-) as always there won't be a ton of editing initially. I still think things are fine the way they are, but everything needs editing and polishing up, etc. 
          
          Can't wait to post. :-)

@ahkaswrites I should have been born a hundred years ago :-)

@ahkaswrites yeah that's so true. Most people don't read today LOL :-)

@PompeyMagnusson I don't have anyone else who's into reading, but of I do come across them, I'll let you know. 

Did you take down your other book?

Four perspective changes in one chapter... I listed where the prospective changes are, but did I jump the shark? Is it too confusing? Where did that itch come from? 
          
          Let me know in the comments :-)

Just released chapter 2 with edit. Would like feedback on the changing perspectives as I tried something completely different. Curious. :-)