Pro_gamzer
So today is gonna to be the last chapter of this series and all the credits of this story goes to icyiclo he was the one who inspired me and with that I end this story
Pro_gamzer
Pro_gamzer
Finally my mind came back from vacation the new chapter is out so go and check it
Pro_gamzer
So i am running out idea and i need some suggestions on what the next chapter should be
Pro_gamzer
Thankyou for the tips i will make sure to improve my story
Joel0f8c
I would like to help you make your story better if you want me too I can give you some advice on here
Joel0f8c
Some if the first things I would recomend is to put "" arond sentences when a cheriacter is talking so readers can distinguish when a cheriacter is talking or not. The next thing I recomend tell us whitch person is talking. The last thing I recomend is if you do P.O.Vs (point of view) in futer chapters use words to form a first person P.O.V like I.
