@sartify86 Sure thing!
CRITIQUE OF DOOM: The pacing is a bit fast, slowing it down a bit will convey more emotion and help you visualize the characters more. Also, read through the chapters and figure out appropriate places for commas and periods. If it doesn't sound good read aloud, then it doesn't sound good to readers. I think the idea and the plot is great, but some elements seem thrown in randomly. Like when Izzy and I-forget-his-name were fighting Alec and the two girls, Izzy saying she could fight just seemed random and out of the blue to me, maybe put something at the beginning to explain it. Like say, she's really into boxing. Then you can have say, her friends went to one of her matches and met up after, thereby setting up the scene for them telling her to go in the house and explaining why she can fight. Overall, I like the story and are excited to see where you take it. :)
