Sunsetstories03

Comments on 'That summer':
          -maybe try to get into the action quicker, there are too many descriptors to start the book. I know it's hard not to describe exactly what you see in your mind, but sometimes saying it all closes the space for imagination. I think this story could really go places. Just keep working and reread/ revise often. I have found that it helps to go over what you've done already. 
          
          Hope that helps
          ~Sunset.story

Raquel9206

@user09109290  Thank you very much, I'll try my best to make this story interesting
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