Hey so I noticed you offer critiques ? :) Any chance you could give this one a go? :) Its a completed novel so you might enjoy that :3
http://www.wattpad.com/story/673631-the-urbem-completed
Inferior and Subservient. That’s the words they used over 3,000 years ago when asked to describe a woman; well, reader, let me tell you that things have changed quite a bit. Enter a worldwide revolution, 3,000 years of judgment, and two rebellious girls whose lives were forced together by a twist of fate. When men are nothing and women are everything, will two unlikely heroines be able to fight against it all and save the endangered species of man?