Redemption_Seeker

Away for a month... no wi-fi and no wattpad. Hope all goes well. :P

opulent_

"❤ give this heart to everyone you don't want to lose in 2014 including me if you care. Try to collect 12 it's not easy! You have 20 minutes to see what happens in 30 minutes! Be honest and send this to everyone who made you smile this year!" 
          
          Thanks for being such an interesting person to talk to.

opulent_

Aha, its fine. No worries.
            
            Thank you and you deserve that heart, for being such an amazing friend and no problem!
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Redemption_Seeker

@Tekkenfan Oh my jelly, why am I only seeing this now? *smack head* I didn't notice you posted until I checked my profile, and then it's like, "Oh my, but I'm on a tight schedule!" Nonetheless, here you are, back again. Does posting it here count? :P (I'll transfer it over later. I don't want to have to post twice on your wall in a day! :P )
            
            "❤ give this heart to everyone you don't want to lose in 2014 including me if you care. Try to collect 12 it's not easy! You have 20 minutes to see what happens in 30 minutes! Be honest and send this to everyone who made you smile this year!" 
            
            Thanks for being there and talking to me. I really appreciate it. *big smiles*
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Redemption_Seeker

I was given a second chance. 
          But, I never wanted it. 
          It costed my sister her life. 
          You don’t get many second chances in life. A lot of people seek redemption, to be offered a second chance to right something they did wrong. Some wanted a second chance in their teens. Some wanted redemption in their middle years, having taken a wrong turn in life. Some wanted a second chance in their late years, hoping to change the thing they regretted most. 
          I got a second chance. And to this day, I regret it. 
          
          (Do you guys like the opening? This is the opening of my current WIP. Honestly, tell me, guys, does this opening suck you in and make you want to read more?) :)

Redemption_Seeker

(I can comment now!) Thanks for your input, I would think about it. Thanks! (It makes me feel good. :P)
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opulent_

I really like this opening. Its vague which is a really good thing at this point because we are given a small insight, making us want to read more.
            
            You use the phrase "second chance" a lot, maybe try and alter it.
            
            GREAT WORK!
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Redemption_Seeker

I'm sorry, if you're still waiting for my critiques... well if you're lucky you will receive them. I will try my best to finish my critiques soon, but if you don't, then forget about me. Things have been hectic lately, and critiques do take me a long time. The pace is going slow, so... my critique list will be cleared slowly. I am sorry.

reticentedx

Hi! I've just started on my new book, Believe My Lies and I'm four chapters in! Could you please leave constructive criticism/feedback? It would be much appreciated :D I'll check out you're book and if you'd like I'll give a feedback on it :D

itsaven

Thank you so much for adding my story to yet another list of yours. :D

Redemption_Seeker

I just wanted to tidy up my critique list a bit. There are just too many books to critique, and creating a critiquing history list seems to be appropriate. Considering there's like, 12 books on my critiquing list.
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