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About "my sex camp (larry stylinson)"
can I just say that this story is kind of awkward? I don't mean to hurt your feelings or anything. I just wanna help you. There aren't really much feelings in there and honestly it's a weird idea (a sex camp? serious?). Add more details and slow down. This is going way to fast. Start off by explaining about the sex camp (weirdest idea ever) and then more how harry looks and what they both feel about each other. Who says Harry is even gay at first? He said there were only coming girls so he meant he fucked girls. I'm just helping. Give the readers a reason to go further with your story (it hasn't really done it so far).
The idea is weird, but different and original. Because it's weird, you should make it special. but right now you're ruining the idea with going so far. prove me that harry and louis are in love. i don't want them to tell it each other. prove it to me.