@kotlcandsokeefe I THINK IT'S REALLY GOOD!! But, if I were to edit this, I feel like the last sentence/what Keefe says is a bit clunky compared to the tenderness of everything else. I feel like it should be worded a little bit differently to evoke the same feelings as earlier (so, stronger emotions. THE USE OF THE WORD "FIERCELY" EARLIER IS SO GOOD!)
By *spiciness* what do you mean? If you mean flair, I think you could add a little bit more about them holding each other. Like, in books it typically describes ~how~ he's holding her, ~where~ their hand placements are (on her lower back, around her middle, etc.), ~and other things~, my personal favorite being his mouth/head is in/on her head/hair. You could also describe the tone of voice--was his voice smooth, and her's breathy? Something like that :p