Riseofartemis

Got a few questions to those who read my book "The two Scarlet Women." 
          	I know the Story is a bit confusing since I have a prolog in it which still isn't finished, that explains their entire dinamic and how they ened up in that situation up intil the main start of the series timeline.
          	
          	1) Are the characters written realisticaly how they would be in real life as if the female characters act like women and the males act like men?
          	
          	2) What could be improved in the writing of the interactions? or even certain chapters that need fixing or more fleshed out explanations. 
          	
          	3) Are they behaving in a straight line not out of character? I know Irene is known as the roughless maniac but in the flashback in the show she's a kind and gentle queen who fights for her kingdom, which is why she behaves like that once cured.
          	
          	4) Is the male lead acting exactly how a man would, as some know he had a lot of interactions with the female characters before he got into the relationship with Irene or rather Elsie at the time?
          	
          	Critizes every part that you think needs it.

Riseofartemis

Got a few questions to those who read my book "The two Scarlet Women." 
          I know the Story is a bit confusing since I have a prolog in it which still isn't finished, that explains their entire dinamic and how they ened up in that situation up intil the main start of the series timeline.
          
          1) Are the characters written realisticaly how they would be in real life as if the female characters act like women and the males act like men?
          
          2) What could be improved in the writing of the interactions? or even certain chapters that need fixing or more fleshed out explanations. 
          
          3) Are they behaving in a straight line not out of character? I know Irene is known as the roughless maniac but in the flashback in the show she's a kind and gentle queen who fights for her kingdom, which is why she behaves like that once cured.
          
          4) Is the male lead acting exactly how a man would, as some know he had a lot of interactions with the female characters before he got into the relationship with Irene or rather Elsie at the time?
          
          Critizes every part that you think needs it.

Yashmu007

Are the chapters in the erza and irene story not in order or something?

Yashmu007

Storys great so far im enjoying it
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Riseofartemis

@Yashmu007 took a look at it and changed them. 
            
            Also tell me if you like the story so far. I know its confusing that I'm adding in a backstory at this point.
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Yashmu007

@Riseofartemis from reassurance up to reveal it seems to be out of order past that I'm not sure haven't gone that far
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Chaosblaster90000

So I'm curious why did you set up heine and Juliet to be in love with y/n in the erza and irene story but didn't go anywhere else with it and I was wondering do you think you could do a x male reader story with those two or something like that

Chaosblaster90000

Oh ok now I get it thanks
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Riseofartemis

@ Chaosblaster90000  No, what I did with them is as they have never interacted with a boy before they got confused, they didn't know what to do.and Y/n as a boy just went for his instinct. I don't think that I will be doing a story for them. At least not any time soon.
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ikumi-senpai

Why did you skip the infinity clock arc and the preliminary round in the grand magic games In the 
          male Saiyan reader x erza Scarlett book

Riseofartemis

@NicAljoe the infinity clock Arc is just a filler that has No meaning for the Story in Fairy tail which is why I didn't add it. The OVA's are fun and easy to do as they are just a single Episode. The preliminary rounds aren't important either and would have pretty much been boring to do and read about.
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