Rising_Generation

Currently I’m going through some difficulties. I’ve already posted chapter 1-11 but i’m raving some regrets between pages 2-3 because i feel I include too much gore..? 
          	I want the white clover to match the same feeling black clover got 

Rising_Generation

Heyo~ to everyone out there tonight this would be the first one I make of these?! I hope I don’t mess it up. Well I need to ask everyone this but what feedback do I need? For writing because I want to communicate well between me and the reader