TheLeeDaughter
Title: Taken
Author: Robyn64
Genre: Teen Fiction/Romance
Chapter #: One
Overall Rate (1-10): Eight
Good Points: You’re very detailed and I loved that.
Bad Points: The thing you’re worst at is your punctuation. There were a few missed commas and question marks. You tell instead of showing. In paragraph sixteen, you directly describe her; you have to let it come out bit by bit.
Notes: If you would like to email me the first chapter, I can bold your specific mistakes.