Roeilinda

I'm going to do alot of editing work on the book, so thank you guys for still reading updates will be very late thank you because I'm writing this book for another app.

MercyGrace854

I would like to give you some editing advice. Read it out loud, and wherever you have to slow down when reading, should be a good indicator that's something that needs to be fixed. I'm trying to be positively constructive, but you have a lot that needs fixing. I can't understand most of what you're trying to say, but I'd like to. I had to stop reading because of all the grammatical errors. It's very confusing.
          
          I hope I'm not offending you, but you may want someone else to edit your work, that has a better understanding of how to write in the English language. You're punctuation is all over the place, and you have more then one person speaking in the same paragraph, on numerous occasions. You have the main part of the book set in America, but are using terms from somewhere else to describe the school system. Not to mention two of the classes you mentioned aren't even offered to kids in high school here.
          
          Please don't be offended, I'm just trying to be helpful. I'd like to be able to read your work, and actually understand what you're trying to say. Please let me know if you fix the numerous errors, and arrange the story so it flows better? You have a lot of missing words, and a lot of extra unnecessary words to.
          
          I thought I'd give you a heads up, so you are better aware of what's going on. I know I would want someone to let me know, if my story needed fixing.

MercyGrace854

@Roeilinda The suggestion to read your work out loud to yourself while editing, was actually something I learned from one of my classes. You see, when you read silently to yourself, your brain auto edits sometimes without you realizing it. However, when you read out loud, a different part of your brain is used, which circumvents that. That's why it will be helpful when editing, because the places where you slow down your reading usually end up the spots where something needs to be fixed.
            
            I figured further explanation of my suggestion would be helpful. I hope my suggestions helped you.
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MercyGrace854

@Roeilinda Anytime! :) I started writing a story actually. You should totally check it out. It's nowhere near finished, and I'm kinda taking a break trying to figure out the direction it wants to flow in.
            
            I don't write like most people, with story boards, or diagrams. I just close my eyes, and begin to imagine. I let it flow, like a movie, then capture it down in words. I never know where the story is headed, until it gets where it wants to go. Sometimes new characters pop up where I least expect them.
            
            In my college English classes, sometimes I had to do my writing assignments backwards. I couldn't do the diagramming, and story boarding, until after the story was written. I actually made my instructor pause once, when I told her how I had to do my assignment backwards...and why. The assignment was already graded, so she couldn't change that, but until I told her, she had been praising my work. She held it as a perfect example on how the process was supposed to look. Her speechlessness was priceless. 
            
            If you do read what I have so far, watch how well the story flows. Note the word phrasing I used, and so on. Maybe it might help you better rephrase some of what you already have? I haven't edited it yet, but I rarely need to much when I write.
            
            Note the use of punctuation. Camma's are the places in the sentence, where you would normally take a breath when you speak. Sorry, I'm just trying to be helpful.
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Roeilinda

@MercyGrace854 thank u for ur kindness I appreciate so much
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