Rose_Petal313

@ivy_20_writes Thanks for letting me know, I'll be sure to read it when I get the chance! And comment, of course! :3

Okay thanks a lot
            
            It’s almost like you read my mind
            I was just thinking about that as I jotted down another story in my notebook. I had to insert a little (paragraph) on the notebook and leave it for when I’m writing the second draft. But I guess I’d have to go change this one rn.
            
            Thanks for reading and thanks for the feedback. Check back when I update it if you like. Although I have no idea when that would be

@ivy_20_writes Read it, loved it and I think your story definitely deserves more reads. Keep it up!  
            
            I also have some CONSTRUCTIVE criticism for you.
            I'd suggest not having a character's action in the same paragraph as another's quote unless you make it clear who's speaking. It just gets confusing.
            
            Like when you wrote: "Even if it'll hurt your daughter?" He snorts. "You're such a self-centered scumbag."
            
            It looks like her dad is saying it, not her.
            
            Unlike if you wrote: "Even if it'll hurt your daughter?" 
            
            He snorts. 
            
            "You're such a self-centered scumbag," I add.
            
            I hope that's clear, and I'm sorry if it sounds like lecturing. 
            Thank you for following me, hopefully soon I'll be able to suggest you my story. :)