RudyMacpherson

I am very new to this. This is my first ever short story. Please comment on my story as I would like to hear some positive feedback. I hope you guys enjoy.
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Hi there, I am new to this and just posted my first story. I would love to hear some feedback as  what I need to improve on thank you and hope to see you in the comments