My Nickname is Saloon

HELLO EVERYONE
          
          Yes, I know it has been awhile since I have posted anything but DON'T WORRY! I have just finished the first rough draft for a story and I am already onto a second one. However, I am going to post that first draft one chapter at a time. Keep in mind that this is a rough draft so please be gentle with any feedback. :)
          
          I also have a collection of short stories for you, but not just any short stories. These were created in a unique way. Basically I used a random word generator and used that word to crate a story so I hope you guys enjoy those also.
          
          Enjoy your day!

Hello! 
          I saw your post on vent and wanted to come in and read your work. Wolves has a very promising start, I gave a few inline critiques at the beginning but felt it might be easier to just sit and give advice all together.
          
          You have an interesting concept! Love stories that come from a nonhuman point of view. It's not often done.
          
          Some tips would be to add more detail. Help your reader see what is going on and try bringing in some stronger words. I gave two small examples in my inline that may not help.
          
          As always, read back through your story out loud and find the words that echo or repeat. When you do try to find another way to get your meaning across. This will help make your narrative flow easier and your sentences stronger. 
          
          Also, a lot on your paragraphs could of been written together. Each new paragraph should introduce a new topic. Just avoid lengthy info dumps and you'll be fine.
          
          I did really like what you had so far. Just flesh it out a little more, slow down the pace and add some details and you'll be well on your way!