Hey man, I hope you don't misunderstand me, but I feel your story has really strayed from its original context. It's supposed to be a character-driven story, but as the plot progresses, especially in the second year, you've introduced so many characters whose purpose and purpose I don't understand. For example, making Touji into Ayanokoji's cousin, and other characters, just creates confusion. It would have been better to focus on OC and his brother only. Honestly, you've deviated from the second year's narrative in an original story that has already concluded. You could have slowed down and focused on what needed to be changed in the second year's events. What's really bothering me is the inclusion of characters from Bungo Stray Dogs and the Zenin clan. Trying to connect the protagonist and Ayanokoji was a mistake. Introducing so many OC characters disrupts the story's flow and makes it feel out of place. This is just my opinion, not meant as an insult. I hope you understand.
