Well hello there, for some reason, I’m unable to submit my feedback through your comment section. I suspect it may be because of the length of the write-up. So, I thought I’d leave it here instead:
A wonderful showcase of how these two stubborn idiots would remain exactly that until the very end. I’ll admit, I was really hoping Shinobu would survive. Unfortunately, the story is yours to tell, and you handled it with great care. The setting was excellent, and the flashbacks added a lot to the emotional impact. You already know you’re a 100 in my eyes, but for the sake of the judging criteria and scoring scheme, I have to give this story a 68/100.
[P.S. Your strength is your knowledge of the canon universe. Your main weakness is maintaining flow, but that’s something that will improve with practice. Also, I gave you an extra point because I wasn’t going to write (68-1).]