SAMMYWAMMY59

Hmmm I left for bit didn’t I?

Amaikwaiiokami

Revision is going back and correcting mistakes. Such as grammar or parts of the story that seem off and need a little bit of work to convey the story a bit better.

SAMMYWAMMY59

Thanks for the motivating words ☺️ (I feel happy cause I went though the story’s and saw mine)
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Amaikwaiiokami

@Wolfpupracer59 that's fine, I don't mind helping. Take your time and just do what you can when you can. It's always a pleasure to help.
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SAMMYWAMMY59

@Amaikwaiiokami  Thanks, and sorry I cant respond that much,Im at school ;-;
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Amaikwaiiokami

Your book, "We are who we are," can use a bit of revision. There's slight grammatical errors and the need of indentation to break down those lengthy paragraphs. Other than that, the plot seems okay, but be careful as to how you're addressing and deciding to narrate the story. It was a bit confusing reading it but just a little bit of revision and you should be just fine! :)

SAMMYWAMMY59

@Amaikwaiiokami  Thank you very much on the information,but can you tell me what 'revision' is 0-0'
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SAMMYWAMMY59

So, I’ve been thinking about starting a new book, it’s ‘Banana Bus Crew x Male Reader’ If you guys don’t know what that is, it’s Vanoss and the crew in GTA and their like a heist and serial killer gang, I know I have a lot of story’s to finish, but I just want to try something different, the reader maybe be 14 or 12, or somewhere in that rang, not to mention a serial killer. So, tell what you all think!