Star Wars Fanfics

@stitch4321 all the above is for u :3

Now, onto the part that you actually have interest about, the text itself!
          I have some few things to say, too.
          First off, the characters feel too detached about what is happening to them, and don't really fit the personality they have been given in the movie. For example, when Rey evokes the fact she was made pregnant - and not even voluntarily, moreover - she sounds cynical. She sounds like "yeah, it's bothering, but now that it's done, let's go through it". This.. Well, doesn't really fits Rey's personality. I think anyone learning this, would be like, "WTF?" and really would be straight up mad at whoever did that to them. Rey included.
          Concerning the dialogues, they really are too short and lack a lot detail. You barely ever evoke how your characters feel, when they are talking or are being told something. Also, they barely ever talk for more than one sentence. This fits cinema a lot, however.. Not a book :3 Or at least, less. The right balance between text and descriptions is hard to find though, there is no magic recipe for it, I don't think I have found it myself.
          
          That's all I had to say! I hope I was of any help, and mostly, that you will keep up the story! You have put a lot of time into it already, I'm sure you're determined UwU

Second big point, the fact that Rey became pregnant through Ben saving her.. That's, not really possible with the Force. Like, not at all. The way Ben saved Rey's life through the Force is more similar to one of the ways Darth Plagueis - Sidious' master - was maintaining himself alive. It is related to the Dark Side of the Force, and is a kind of sacrifice. Basically, Ben drained his own energy to manipulate and increase the amount of energy in Rey's body. The drain killed him. Usually, in SW's history of Dark Side users, though, it was used the other way around, with non consenting people x3 Come to think of it, it's actually supposed to be a very complex ritual, so it could however justify the fact that Ben was able to save himself as a ghost? However, it was a Dark Side ritual. Ben's ghost, wouldn't actually be Ben. It would be Kylo Ren. Dark Side and Light Side force ghosts differ. Dark Side ghosts actually enhance the.. Twisted, angry, aspects of the person, while Light Side ghosts generally don't change the person.

Okay, so, I read a bit of it, so I will give you my opinion. It's personal, so don't forget to do as you feel, too, kay? :3
          
          First of all, I know you probably didn't bother that part since you rather are into the "reylo" ship, but I will still comment on the SW lore elements.
          A LOT isn't accurate to Star Wars' lore. I mean, a lot wasn't in Disney's movies in the first place, but I'll comment that anyways. Regarding Force ghosts, any Force user couldn't reappear as a ghost. Many more Jedi could than Sith, but even for Jedi it was something difficult to achieve. Only Jedi masters of great knowledge, such as Qui-Gon Jin and Grand Master Yoda for example, managed to do so. Ben was a Sith, but most importantly, he was a kid and barely had any viable training to the use of the Force. He could do simple things such as levitation-like manipulations, but it was pretty much it. His lack of training is proved by his fight against Rey on the Starkiller base; Rey manages to actually stand against him although she barely ever held a lightsaber before.

Heyyy
          if it isn't any trouble could you need my book called 'ben with brown eyes' and tell me what you think. be honest - even if its negative!
          if not, dont worry. 
          tyyyy