just some constructive criticism: i feel like you’re trying way too hard to write the story in a sophisticated 1800s way. to the point where it’s hard to understand and just doesn’t make sense. the details are phenomenal and you’re very talented but you’re doing too much, there’s a limit, especially since most of the things you’re explaining in such detail don’t add anything to the plot of the story. focus on the important things, and don’t force this type of classic, jane austen type of writing because it’s not working very well . just do what comes naturally to you