Just a few things. Punctuation is something to look at. Some areas are too much and other very little. But mainly good.
The other thing is the plot is a little hard to follow. It was confusing to understand the story and I feel it went fast.
It's a good idea! These are jaunt a few suggestions to consider.
Hi I was wondering if you would mind if I did an Aunt Natasha story but instead of Percy it would be Leo if it's okay with you tell cuz I know that it was your original idea for Natasha to be an aunt thanks bye