prabanj
Hey ....your story has smooth flow in its plot and is structured.....but don't take me wrong ,as another indian reader i would like to suggest few improvement and point out few mistakes if you don't mind. If it's okay to get my opinion then just say the word....
prabanj
I am sorry if i have overwhelmed you ...but i felt these are few changes which will make the story more interesting than before and more indulging ....if you have any confusion on this ... just msg me again....i don't know how serious you are about this book...so i don't want to speak more in detail and look like a total doofus that's y i stopped..
prabanj
And more description of other people not just their appearance but also therir character is needed...you can put them in a situation and then slowly show the essence of therir charcter to the reader