@Kamaljeet0805 Hi! Thank you for the advice, but I really like this style. I also want my readers to guess what the characters are saying at the same time. I had thought of placing the translation after the dialogue but thought that it would be too distracting, and that the readers would skip the language and head for the translation, which is understandable of course.
I followed an advice online which says 'Write long passages in the foreign tongue; translate nothing'
Thank you so much for reading and for the advice. I will try to consider it, but until then, this will be the norm for the story. Thank you once again