Sassy Muffin

@GB0213 changing things don't fret. 

@captainakram5 @captainakram5 yes, I did but then I immediately took it down because it wasn't supposed to be uploaded yesterday. I read your story, I don't know much about the anime you're basing it off of.  But from what I've seen it's a pretty good start. I personally like longer chapters but you keep the way you write.  

@SassyMuffin138 is to read

Yeah 

@captainakram5 did you want me to like read this? You didn't like write anything so I'm confused

I was thinking about making them straight, although I want to redo the entire story again. Right now it feels rushed, which is what I'm doing with my My hero story right now.

Because i pretty much hope it's straight because they're already too many yaoi books and in comments in first chapter there was some talking about it

Here are my  thoughts. I like the music Quirk — reminds me of Kahono — and you’ve got cool ideas, your style of writing is great, but Ryu feels kinda well Invin-[title card]. He’s got Gojo powers and reality-bending music, and by chapter 6 he’s already unlocking Red and Blue with no real fights or struggle. Each part it's kind of short, only being maybe just a thousand words long. It's like there’s no buildup or tension, he just seems to be unstoppable. If you paced it out more and gave him setbacks or limits, it’d hit way harder. Just my honest take.  you’ve got something good, it just needs time to breathe.  This is why I don't personally like Gojo.
            

Thanks!

@hellraiser2132 I'll check it out

@SassyMuffin138 Okay well do you also do gender bends?

@SassyMuffin138 Well question do you do single interest or harems as well?

@SassyMuffin138 Cool can I tell you a story like the lore?