Hello! I have tried to skip some work to review the Prologue and Chapter 1 of One Nil to You (I mistakenly thought the prologue was chapter 1...)
Anyways, I feel that while your stories are elegant and holds some sort of beguiling air that makes me quite intrigued, I feel that in the long run, such stories may not be that feasible. Firstly, although you hold a huge range of vocabulary and wonderful grammar (something I appreciate in fanfiction as it doesn't mean that if it is a fan based work, it has to be subpar) I somewhat cannot relate too well to the character. Aside from already canon characters, you develop your characters wonderfully, giving us good details and background information. However, especially for your main characters, you happen to go a little bit overboard with them. Not to say that it is bad, but in the midst of that, you have created an overly perfect character that distracts me from fully enjoying the story. It lacks development as a person because he or she is already too perfect and if she or he laments too much, it becomes more of a rant that a story. I personally prefer characters with a little handicap or are limited due to the typical human nature of us, as human beings. No problem with prodigies or geniuses, but they have to have some sort of weakness, be it they are emotional dependent, arrogant or maybe snobby. They could be immature or even overly reliant. They can be not too beautiful but they eventually learn and get over it. It makes it more relatable and more inspiring. Your works are a representation of yourself. You can do anything you want with it, but I feel that inspiring others or even tapping onto the human aspect of us, that is what writers are meant to do; to connect.