Sword of Extermination

@Seraphile07 it's in my story last chap

@Seraphile07 ig he/she deleted the reply. I didnt see it. 

  @Self_Satisfaction There are people who loves to read about tragedy and whatever stuff im writing. I don't it's plain. Those who read knows if its about popular ex bf or depressed gf. You're assuming the whole story wrong. 
            
            
            

I respectfully disagree with @Self_Satisfaction Opinion
            
            So the first accusation is AYBM is plain because the concept is overused
            WRONG, a simple concept + strong execution > a unique concept + weak execution
            By your logic Better call saul should be trash cus the concept is basically a lawyer becoming criminal
            Yet the execution is top tier thus making it easily top 3 live action series
            So there's that
            
            Now for your second argument
            
            Yes the story is predictable, or maybe not
            But the process is unpredictable
            Thats what makes any story stand out
            
            Now onto your most weakest claim
            
            Characters have no depth or layer
            
            IMO Taruns the best written character
            Tarun layers include self awareness + inaction, villain-> Victim, how he sees himself and what he does
            Taruns core trait is cowardice as defense
            
            Also if you have a functional brain then you can probably see the generational implication of what he's becoming
            
            If done right it's easily top tier writing
            
            He's very consistent with his behavior also(consistently conflicted and consistently avoids)
            
            
            Now the story has a very complex layering system
            
            Dual past and present timeline
            
            The story is not plot ridden
            Its character → decision → consequence → emotion
            
            Aybm also has clear themes
            Like regret, love vs ego, truth vs self image, past vs present
            
            It's not just a sad story
            It's about longing, nostalgia and resentment
            
            So respectfully i have to disagree with your take on aybm
            You can prove me wrong I'm open to a debate

@tfis_shii Okay so
            
            Opening is top tier
            Story structure is very strong too
            Very high emotional impact writing
            Each dialogues are precise enough to show the emotions of each characters
            Dual timeline structure is excellent
            Excellent Symbolism, with the rain and music everywhere 
            Good environmental story telling with the diary part 
            Very high emotional peaks(Interview part) 
            
            These are the strengths, keep the rest of the story like that
            
            Now moving on to the issues
            
            The concept is very overused, popular ex/bf/crush and unknown/depressed girlfriend
            Story will be predictable thus causing the readers to drop it midway(keep in mind this statement applies only this 6 chapters future chapters will be different) 
            
            Characters rely on tragedy and narration too much, low layers and complexity
            
            Very heavy tone with little relief
            
            Underutilization of side cast (this might be removable as they might be more featured in upcoming chapter)
            
            Pacing imbalance, past and present is pretty inconsistent
            
            
            Now these are just my opinion
            If you manage to execute these perfectly it'll be easily a top tier story
            
            Further questions or doubts will be clarified