Serenity Loves'pain Edmonds

Hey read my Story n tell me wat u think @LadyErato

i inbox u 

@SerenityLovespainEdm ...... try to make the paraagrahs shorter and grammer is a little off.Puncation placement and make the conversation  flow naturally  between the chacters ,like a real conversation  would.

@Cynnimon thank u this my first one 

Thanks for becoming a fan,it means alot to u took the tyme to check out my work <3. I'll gladly give you feed back.