Kait

hey would you please read my sea patrol story

Oh, and if you could, do you mind telling me anything I could improve on my writing style? I'm open to opinions ..
          The only thing that annoys me is that I don't know how to do italics -.- 

Or lordy :P yeah, I know him, we're friends, Ahaha, I guessed it was him coz I got curious and looked through my friend list :L, tell him I said hey 

My broher's Joshua Williams. Do you know him? 

@SheWritesInCursive Thank you so much for the critism!! I'll go fixing that up right away :D 
          
          Lol, who's your brother ? O.o bahaha

I meant your classes. Not our. Am on my phone and can't see what I'm typing properly. 

No problem :) My brother is in some of our classes. He was telling me about how your story and when he had the link I wanted to read. I am envious of your descriptive talent. Only criticism is that you sometimes used the same action twice in a sentence. Like the one about glancing over the rose bush to glance at them. It just disrupts the flow of the sentence. Other than that I really enjoyed and I look forward to reading more from you :) 

Thank you for fanning !!! :D