@ShoeyIsMyOTP
I really liked the story and it did move a bit to fast, but that isn't my point. I think you should add more detail, and try to bring out the emotion in the fan fic. it seemed like you didn't really get into the story. alot of it was vague. No I'm not a writer, in fact I'm terrible at it, but I'm a huge reader. but overall it was a good story. I hope this help you in your future fan fics.
You better make other fan fiction
Im glad I didn't too I might be starting another fan fic soon though so I might not post every day
I'm so glad you didn't
Aw thanks I decided not to delete it
Grammar doesnt matter and i think your fanfic is great!
@Facepalmx But Everyone seems to say stuff like oh it's moving too fas oh you're grammar sucks
No! I love your fanfic!!
Hey guys I think I might take my fanfic down :c