I've spent twenty years on this planet, and I still haven't started my life yet.  I'm a snacker, not a fighter; so I'm not going to talk down anybody's story!
I'm mostly on this site to read great stories and post supporting comments.......
I am not that good at writing stories so I'll leave that to the other authors.
I'm proly sittin on the couch witha big ol bag of hot Cheetos reading your story.