Shosetsuka

@AprilV Just tell me when your next work would be out because I don't open my YM at all.

@MaskedLiars It's alright it was a fun read anyways. 

@MaskedLiars A novelist normally has 2 types of main character, 
          
          One picturing herself and using it to create the protagonist
          Second is using your dreamed to be persona in the near future as your protagonist...
          
          So which is it?

@MaskedLiars From chapters one to three:
          It was good, nice job cookie! The phasing of the story is normal and you only over-speeded a little,
          As for the wrong spellings and grammar I already fixed it.
          
          For your chapter four:
           if you make a statement like “just by watching, made my heartbeat quickened, cheeks flushed and adrenaline rush through my veins” the next line should be Awesome! and not Awesome. (Remember to show character emotions properly.)
          
          I noticed that she is in a present time but you are using past tense, I already corrected the parts so no worries there. =)
          
          I sent your work to your yahoo account, oh and are you impersonating yourself using Blaire?

@MaskedLiars send your work here: ShosetsukaRei@yahoo.com

Yo, can I ask if the novel I'm writing is too sadistic? What do you think?