Hey there lovely ! First of all, thank you for your sweet comment :)
I went ahead and read your poem that you have posted and I think it is a very great start. You can definitely grow from it as any other writer can grow from one piece of writing to the next. Never stop writing and keep moving forward.
You will definitely want to spell check and make sure grammar is correct if you want it perfect and all, of course :) But other than that, a very great piece xo