KarmaCatStudios

Thank goodness! Well then, I’ll give them a read if that’s the case.

@Cool05guy2000 and I handtype them

@Cool05guy2000 no, I used screenshot

@Cool05guy2000 one thing I would do is decide which is more important- the game or the character. Whichever is more important, give them a more in depth introduction. Spend an entire chapter introducing them, and half of that chapter talk about the way the two things interact. If the character is more important, give us a chapter on his life, how the game changed it, and how good he is at the game. If it’s important at all, help us bond with the characters he built and plays as in the game. 
            
            If the game is more important, tell us some backstory about it. Is it haunted? Was there a wide string of incidents? Is this copy one that was found in an attic? Is it a rare game? Was there anything weird about it before buying, during opening, or when he first played it?

@Cool05guy2000 I can’t write your story for you, I don’t know the mysteries you have and the story you’re picturing in your mind, plus your writing style is uniquely yours. But I could help you organize and edit it 

Another thing is the first chapter is jumbled, jumping around from time to time. Something I would do is turning the introduction of the game into a flashback of the character working, purchasing the game, and opening it, with the words on the paper being a scrolling text on first startup. 

@Cool05guy2000 how are you?

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