MelanieCoetzee

Hey ʕ•ᴥ•ʔ
          
          Just wanted to drop by and give you a gigantic (づ｡◕‿‿◕｡)づ hug and say thank you soooo so much for reading and voting on Magically Marked, I hope the story continues to grip you and that its a good read :)
          
          Feel free to let me know of anything you can be improved on or just to drop me a random comment ʕ•ᴥ•ʔ
          
          Hugs
          Mel

SilverSymphony

When serenity turns evil it was a bit confusing. I think you could have either added a bit more about the evil inside her or had something leading up to it like hint earlier on in the story about her being taken over. You could have even added a flash back from where the evil came from or when it plagued her grandparents.  You could also add a few more details about your other characters to make their personalities stand out more or maybe little snippets of their past. I hope this is helpful i really love your plot  good luck getting it published once you finish and edit it. your story really  has gripped me and i plan on finishing it soon when i have the time. ⊂((・▽・))⊃ - Silver.
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