Sindhu Nedunchezhian

Just letting y'all know that Read 4 Read and Follow 4 Follow is welcome!!! Don't hesitate.... Just leave a reply here and I will check out the stories you have to tell....
          P.S: Chapter 12 is here.... Aria is speeding through the challenges.... Read to find out how she deals with Mount Tzeris!!
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If you are a new writer and are looking for someone to evaluate and point out inconsistencies in your book.... don't forget to check out @aar_nalu
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If you are looking for a good book with well established plot and impeccable narration.... Check out - Arise From Dark by @KJW_1992
          
          Wattpad link:
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/387425339?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=story_info&wp_page=story_details_button&wp_uname=Sindhu_N
          
          Don't forget to check it out!!
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Hi there dear author...
          
          Start a new fantasy story with a new writer. A new book in the world of imagination. Make ur imagination and butterflies go wild with our lead characters CONAN & LUNA...
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          He fell first but she fell harder...❤
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          He wants to heal her but will He end up healing himself...❤
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          CONAN
          Touch her and I will give her a lighter to  let her burn you herself...
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          LUNA
          He is the light in my darkness, without him I am lost..
          
          Can u pls vote and follow I will do the same??

Finally!!! Chapter 10 is out.....
          Aria is getting ready for the second challenge....
          

I know it's been a while since I posted.... Updates will be irregular and slow for the next few weeks.... January is a busy month.... Sorry 

Hi Sindhu! 
          Thank you for adding FIRE AND MAGIC and other stories of mine to your reading list and thanks for the follow! I hope you enjoy reading them. I’d really appreciate it if you could comment and let me know what you thought of them. 
          I am releasing one chapter a week of Fire and Magic.

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          I got you all a little surprise !!
          I asked AI to visualise a few characters from my book- Shards Of A Soul-
          Check it out and let me know what you think.
          Happy New Year!! 
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Okay here’s my feedback on your story. You should work most on your pacing as a writer. You’re good at describing a scene, as well as proper use of grammar and dialogue, so it probably feels like you’re doing your best, but pacing is a part that you really can’t miss. In the prologue, the first read had me a bit turned around. The dialogue didn’t feel right between two adversaries, and the random in inclusion of a secret heir had me reading again. The second time around it feels more natural and fitting, but I still think it is incredibly random that a scribe runs into the middle of a battlefield and two rulers with a prophecy that hasn’t been mentioned in a century. You should time it separately or make it seem more natural. As a suggestion, you can have a bit more fluff conversation, or something announcing the scribe’s arrival, like the sudden pause of the battle, or a change I the air. Just make it feel less abrupt. Also, the inclusion of the little girl after the prophecy is a bit strange. I know exactly what you’re going for,  but why is there a girl by a battlefield? And what does it mean by her parents “dissolving into red”. Are they physically dissolving, or are they disappearing into the battlefield? There’s just not enough context to help me visualise this personally. The sentences at the end of each chapter are a nice touch, though. Phew, ok if you want my thoughts on Aria’s chapters I’m happy to give my thoughts. As the main story, I’ve got a lot to say and btw sorry for this monstrous paragraph. I hoped this helped!

The Aequitas Ceremony is finally here!