AstridValkyrie579
Hey, sissy!!! Love your story and its twists & turns!! Author to Author pinpoint: your story has some misspellings, missing words, and punctuations. Maybe context and details too?? Not sure about the last one though. I just wanted to help you like you're helping me with my story.
Love ya <3
AstridValkyrie579
Almost like the story is moving too fast and some details are being skipped over, or forgotten, or there isn't enough depth into the when, why, and how.
AstridValkyrie579
Some of the details (in my author's brain) seem to appear 'too early' like Layla having a power that was lost or secret; some of the details seem to happen rapidly/in quick sessions and (this might just be me) there is a bit of a disconnect between the characters and the plotline.
SissyMissy2015
@AstridValkyrie579 Thanks love!!! Leave some comments where I missed words or spelling issues and I'll fix them. What context do you mean?