Hii, here to give you a feedback on your book like you asked me to. I'm gonna be honest and please don't it too seriously. This is your first book and you're facing the struggles as all new writers are. But don't let that stop you, continue writing I'm sure with your motivation and good thinking you're just gonna progress. Just a piece of advice don't rush it too much♡ Hope I didn't offend you, book is very good for a beginner so go girl♡