Hey, thanks for adding my Hetaoni fanfic to your reading list! I really appreciate it. I just read your 2p FACE family one shots and it's great so far. Your ideas are simple yet solid and concise.
As a fellow writer, I'd love to give you some constructive criticism, if you don't mind! I promise you, I'm not trying to trash your writing or anything, I've been writing for years now and I would just like to give you a few tips.
1) Paragraphs-These are very important because if you write a single, huge paragraph people tend to skim through it, it's just what the human mind was made to do. You made a new paragraph when someone different is talking. Remember to separate dialogue from descriptions/actions.
2) Descriptions-Speaking of descriptions, these are essential when it comes to writing. You can use descriptions to do the following:
~Tell the reader where the setting is
~create emotion (instead of saying a person feels sad or heartbroken, describe it instead. Ex-You could say 'so and so' clutches their shirt in anger or distressingly runs their heavy fingers through their hair)
And that's pretty much it. Good luck in the future! You're doing a wonderful job so far :)
