Hey there! I saw your post on Reddit today, and me being the curious being that I am, decided to check your book out. Oh! I'm a writer too, by the way.
I do have a few tips for you if you don't mind.
1) You might want to check the description for the book. There stands "Jace and Clary have seen...." Seeing what the book is about, you might want to change that to "Jace and Clary haven't seen..."
2) I noticed that your sentences are a bit long. You might want to consider making them shorter. For example, the first paragraph of your book is:
Clarissa Morgenstern sighed in content, as she finally released her red locks from the confinement of a tight ponytail, gently massaging her scalp while her cat Talon rubbed against her legs in the doorway of her one bedroom apartment.
You can change that to:
Clarissa Morgenstern sighed in content as she finally released her red locks from the confinement of a tight ponytail. As she gently massaged her scalp, her cat Talon arrived and rubbed slowly against her legs in the doorway of her one-bedroom apartment.
It's just a suggestion, you don't have to do it like that. I'm going to stop bothering you now. I do wish you the most of luck in the art of writing.
P.S. I don't know if you're interested, but I have a Shadowhunters book called 'Shadowhunters season 4'. If you want to, you can check it out.
Until out next encounter!
