@Skymoon6311 - I don't think you over-describe at all. I really like the way you write. It's very visual. I can see what's happening, and it makes me want to read more. Your opening scene was excellent! The bad guys kidnapping the family, the teenage daughter trying to escape through the backyard to get help, and then the hunky guy to the semi-rescue--, her uncle is a piece of ****! I think it's really good work!